CK Lynn

I really liked the fire verse. But this character sounds way boring, really uptight.

I really liked this! The description of looking in was good. It went on a little too long, though. Have you tried lyrics? You'd be good.

Very nice concept. The ryme almost seemed unintentional..very good. It needs a significant amount of development, though.

I really liked it. Very discriptive.

Arrg...I can relate. Usually most people stick there fingers in their ears and say "I'm not listening until you speak English" when I talk. It did seema little self-belittling, though.

It was good, but almost not a poem. I think you'd be good at fantasy.

It was very exspresive. I didn't really like the first verse, though.

was interesting. I think the names need work. You refer to Della as a young woman, but she seems older to me.

I liked it, but the beginning didn't flow as well as the rest of the piece.

I liked it. The imagery was really good, even though you didn't describe much, it was really easy to form a picture of what was happening. The colored speech wasa ...

It has a nice rythm, but that doesn't make it a good poem. It doesn't say anything, or have a meaning.

I really liked it. Some of the verses don't seem to fit in, though and it carries on a little too long. With a little rewriting it would be excellent.

I don't know what you mean (falling asleep, maybe? You mentioned dreams.) But I like it

I liked it but it ended to quickly. Also, some of the lines look like they should be one line, like these two: She was a dancing girl. types with ...

It's good, but it seems to have been rushed, and just slapped down. The reapting lines have it tottering on the edge of being a poem. Have you tried song ...